Tổng hợp IELTS Writing Task 2 Sample Band 8 hay nhất

1. Tiêu chí chấm điểm IELTS Writing

Tiêu chi chấm IELTS writing band 8 task 1 và task 2 sẽ nhìn như sau:

Bạn sẽ thấy trong phần mô tả band điểm, một bài viết band 8 là bài viết sử dụng một cách khéo léo những từ vựng không phổ biến. Thuật ngữ phổ biến là những từ và cụm từ chúng ta sử dụng hàng ngày còn các thuật ngữ không phổ biến được sử dụng khi chúng ta thảo luận về các chủ đề cụ thể hoặc khi chúng ta sử dụng ngôn ngữ thành ngữ (cụm động từ).

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2. Bài mẫu band 8 

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Sample 1

Some people think that people should be given the right to use fresh water as they like. Others believe governments should strictly control the use of fresh water. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Luận điểm chính: 

Body paragraph 1: Being able to use fresh, clean water is a human's basic necessity

• Water is a fundamental contributing to human’s well-being.

  • If people were not to get an adequate amount of water to sustain basic activities

  • => their human rights would have been violated.

• People have varying needs for water => restricting the amount of water used - disadvantageous

Body paragraph 2: Introducing regulations on fresh water usage

• Water is a scarce resource => if individuals are free to use water at their own discretion => depletion 

• People in some countries who have difficult access to fresh water - receive less as people in other countries have used it extravagantly

Sample: 

Whether citizens should be allowed to use fresh water freely or governments should put restrictions on the amount of fresh water citizens can have access to has gained traction. In my opinion, while each view has its merits, I agree that water usage should be regulated.

On the one hand, being able to use fresh, clean water is a human's basic necessity. First, besides food, water is another fundamental contributing to human’s well-being. Therefore, if people were not to get an adequate amount of water to sustain basic activities such as hydrating themselves, cooking, and cleaning, their human rights would have been violated. Secondly, people have varying needs for water so restricting the amount of water used to an average number would be disadvantageous to those whose businesses involve heavy water usage, for example, people involved in farming activities.

On the other hand, introducing regulations on fresh water usage can have undeniable positive effects. Water is a scarce resource, so making it freely available can lead to depletion of fresh water and unequal distribution of water. As a matter of fact, water sources have been depleting in recent years due to global warming, droughts, and pollution. Consequently, if individuals are free to use water at their own discretion, it will lead to faster exhaustion of this rare resource. Another grave effect is that people in some countries who have difficult access to fresh water will have to receive less as people in other countries have used it extravagantly.

By and large, I opine that despite water being a common property, people should not be given unlimited usage of that resource, but should rather follow the government’s regulations and distribution.

Từ vựng nâng cao:

• fresh water: frɛʃ ˈwɔːtə (Noun) - nước ngọt

  • Ví dụ: Salt water is much more conductive than fresh water is.

• to put restrictions on something: tuː pʊt rɪsˈtrɪkʃənz ɒn ˈsʌmθɪŋ (Verb) - hạn chế một cái gì đó

  • Ví dụ: Whether citizens should be allowed to use fresh water freely or governments should put restrictions on the amount of fresh water citizens can have access to has gained traction.

• a human's basic necessity: ə ˈhjuːmənz ˈbeɪsɪk nɪˈsɛsɪti (Noun) - nhu cầu cơ bản của con người

  • Ví dụ: Being able to use fresh, clean water is a human's basic necessity.

• adequate: ˈædɪkwɪt (Adjective) - đủ

  • Ví dụ: Their earnings are adequate to their needs.

• to hydrate: tu: ˈhaɪdreɪt (Verb) - cung cấp nước cho cơ thể

  • Ví dụ: After you run, drink plenty of water to stay well hydrated.

• disadvantageous: dɪsædvɑːnˈteɪʤəs (Adjective) - bất lợi

  • Ví dụ: The lack of money makes us a disadvantageous position.

• heavy water usage: ˈhɛvi ˈwɔːtə ˈjuːzɪʤ (Noun) - sử dụng nhiều nước

  • Ví dụ: Restricting the amount of water used to an average number would be disadvantageous to those whose businesses involve heavy water usage.

• a scarce resource: ə skeəs rɪˈsɔːs (Noun) - nguồn tài nguyên khan hiếm

  • Ví dụ: Water is a scarce resource, so making it freely available can lead to depletion of fresh water and unequal distribution of water.

• unequal distribution of water: ʌnˈiːkwəl ˌdɪstrɪˈbjuːʃən ɒv ˈwɔːtə (Noun) - phân phối nước không đồng đều

  • Ví dụ: Water is a scarce resource, so making it freely available can lead to depletion of fresh water and unequal distribution of water.

• extravagantly: ɪksˈtrævɪgəntli (Adverb) - phung phí

  • Ví dụ: We are not spending extravagantly, but spending reasonably and temperately.

Sample 2

The education of young people is the main priority in countries around the world. Some people believe that educating adults who cannot read or write is essential for the society and more funding should be made available for it. Do you agree or disagree?

Luận điểm chính: 

Body paragraph 1: A decline in the rate of illiterate adults can offer countries strategic economic advantages

• Increase the number of high quality laborers => improved economic growth

• A high rate of illiteracy among adults => heavy burdens on social assistance

  • Example: monetary assistance during the Covid-19 pandemic

Body paragraph 2: Individuals

• Adults who cannot read nor write often shy away from social interactions => a sense of inferiority 

• Children with illiterate parents help their parents make ends meet  => lose their access to education 

Sample: 

While some people claim that educating the young should be the main concern the world over, others believe that more funds should be allocated to decrease the rate of illiteracy among adults. From my perspective, I side with the latter idea as adult schooling can have positive impacts on the development of countries and individuals.

To start with, a decline in the rate of illiterate adults can offer countries strategic economic advantages. First, this will increase the number of high quality laborers in the country, resulting in improved economic growth. As most white-collar positions’ minimum requirement nowadays is the ability to read and write, illiterate adults will have to resort to low-paid work, which means a loss of tax, as well as scarce resources of intellectual workers. Secondly, having a high rate of illiteracy among adults may also lead to heavy burdens on social assistance. During times of crisis, such as the Covid-19 pandemic, illiterate adults are the ones who are most prone to unemployment. The indication of this is that governments will have to provide them monetary assistance, thus, the larger the number of uneducated grown-ups, the more considerable the subsidy.

Regarding individuals, being able to read and write can be advantageous to one’s mental health and their offsprings. What illiteracy brings to individuals is low self-esteem. Adults who cannot read nor write often shy away from social interactions, as well as experience a sense of inferiority due to their lack of basic abilities. Moreover, children with illiterate parents often lose their access to education. Since their mothers and fathers often cannot find well-paid jobs that can cover their school fees, these kids have to help their parents make ends meet from an early age, resulting in illiteracy from one generation to the next.

All in all, adult schooling is beneficial in terms of economic growth for nations and of fostering well-being for individuals.

Từ vựng nâng cao:

• to decrease the rate of illiteracy among adults: tu: ˈdiːkriːs ðə reɪt ɒv ɪˈlɪtərəsi əˈmʌŋ ˈædʌlts (Verb) - giảm tỷ lệ mù chữ ở người lớn

  • Ví dụ: While some people claim that educating the young should be the main concern the world over, others believe that more funds should be allocated to decrease the rate of illiteracy among adults.

• strategic economic advantages: strəˈtiːʤɪk ˌiːkəˈnɒmɪk ədˈvɑːntɪʤɪz (Noun) - lợi thế kinh tế chiến lược

  • Ví dụ: A decline in the rate of illiterate adults can offer countries strategic economic advantages.

• high quality laborers: haɪ ˈkwɒlɪti ˈleɪbərəz (Noun) - lao động chất lượng cao

  • Ví dụ: Deputy director of FALMI said that from now to the end of 2018 the city would recruit 148,000 high quality laborers to work in key sectors and fields.

• white-collar: ˈwaɪtˈkɒlə (Adjective) - [thuộc] công chức (không phải là công nhân)

  • Ví dụ: Many white-collar workers, like stock brokers and investment bankers, find themselves in the unemployment lines.

• to resort to low-paid work: tu: rɪˈzɔːt tuː ˈləʊˈpeɪd wɜːk (Verb) - dùng đến công việc được trả lương thấp

  • Ví dụ: As most white-collar positions’ minimum requirement nowadays is the ability to read and write, illiterate adults will have to resort to low-paid work, which means a loss of tax, as well as scarce resources of intellectual workers.

• social assistance: ˈsəʊʃəl əˈsɪstəns (Noun) - trợ cấp xã hội

  • Ví dụ: Having a high rate of illiteracy among adults may also lead to heavy burdens on social assistance.

• low self-esteem: ləʊ sɛlf-ɪsˈtiːm (Noun) - lòng tự tôn thấp

  • Ví dụ: What illiteracy brings to individuals is low self-esteem.

• a sense of inferiority: ə sɛns ɒv ɪnˌfɪərɪˈɒrɪti (Noun) - cảm giác tự ti

  • Ví dụ: Adults who cannot read nor write often shy away from social interactions, as well as experience a sense of inferiority due to their lack of basic abilities.

• to lose one's access to education: tu: luːz wʌnz ˈæksɛs tuː ˌɛdju(ː)ˈkeɪʃən (Verb) - đánh mất quyền tiếp cận giáo dục của một người

  • Ví dụ: Children with illiterate parents often lose their access to education.

• to make ends meet: tu: meɪk ɛndz miːt (Verb) - kiếm đủ tiền để sống

  • Ví dụ: Being out of work and having two young children, they found it impossible to make ends meet

Sample 3

Some people think technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crimes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Luận điểm chính: 

Body paragraph 1: Developments in technology have paved the way for an emerging kind of crime: cyber-crime

• Most transactions nowadays are done via the Internet => thieves can hack into one’s account => sending the money to his bank account

  • Example: a number of Vietnamese middle-aged women was swindled out of millions by imposters acting as their children or relatives online

Body paragraph 2: Technological advancements have helped solve cases faster and prevent criminal activities

• High-tech gears and programs can help detect offenders effectively and in a timely manner

  • Example: a 35-year-old cold case in Texas has just been solved using DNA technology 

• Another use of technological developments is to prevent crimes

  • Released convicts will usually be forced to wear a GPS tracking device => many criminals have abandoned their recidivism plan 

Sample

While some people argue that technological advancements help reduce the number of criminal activities, others opine that it actually increases the crime rate. Personally, I side with the former as progress in technology has had a positive impact on the world's crime scene.

On the one hand, developments in technology have paved the way for an emerging kind of crime: cyber-crime. As most transactions nowadays are done via the Internet, thieves can hack into one’s account and tamper with online transactions, sending the money to his bank account instead of that of the actual recipient of the payment. A milder case would be information thievery, in which one’s personal information would be stolen and sold to a third party, who, in a positive case, are advertising companies, or to catfishes, in the worst case scenario. For example, a number of frauds in Vietnam happened to middle-aged women, who were swindled out of millions by imposters acting as their children or relatives online.

On the other hand, technological advancements have helped solve cases faster and prevent criminal activities. First, high-tech gears and programs can help detect offenders effectively and in a timely manner. To illustrate, a 35-year-old cold case in Texas has just been solved using DNA technology. The 1986 murder was thought to be hopeless as no visible evidences were found, yet innovations in crime science has brought new and concrete proofs. Another use of technological developments is to prevent crimes. What this means is that through the use of technology, crime attempts can be deterred. For example, released convicts will usually be forced to wear a GPS tracking device. Thanks to this, many criminals have abandoned their recidivism plan as they could be easily sent back to jail.

To conclude, although there are sound arguments as to why technology developments can facilitate crimes, I believe that, in reality, it can help avert criminal activities.

Từ vựng nâng cao:

• technological advancements: ˌtɛknəˈlɒʤɪk(ə)l ədˈvɑːnsmənts (Noun) - tiến bộ công nghệ

  • Ví dụ: The last decade has been very progressive in terms of the promising technological advancements and transformations.

• to have a positive impact on something: tu: hæv ə ˈpɒzətɪv ˈɪmpækt ɒn ˈsʌmθɪŋ (Verb) - có tác động tích cực đến một cái gì đó

  • Ví dụ: Progress in technology has had a positive impact on the world's crime scene.

• to pave the way for something: tu: peɪv ðə weɪ fɔː ˈsʌmθɪŋ (Verb) - mở đường cho một cái gì đó

  • Ví dụ: Their economic policy pave the way for industrial expansion.

• cyber-crime: ˈsaɪbə-kraɪm (Noun) - tội phạm mạng

  • Ví dụ: Even though cyber-crime is perhaps the fastest-growing industry of the new economy, most businesses are not taking adequate precautions.

• transaction: trænˈzækʃən (Noun) - giao dịch

  • Ví dụ: The entire transaction took place over the phone.

• recipient: rɪˈsɪpɪənt (Noun) - người nhận

  • Ví dụ: Former Nobel Peace Prize recipients include Jimmy Carter and Barack Obama.

• information thievery: ˌɪnfəˈmeɪʃən ˈθiːvəri (Noun) - ăn cắp thông tin

  • Ví dụ: Information thievery is a case in which one’s personal information would be stolen and sold to a third party.

• to prevent criminal activity: tu: prɪˈvɛnt ˈkrɪmɪnl ækˈtɪvɪti (Verb) - ngăn chặn hoạt động tội phạm

  • Ví dụ: Technological advancements have helped solve cases faster and prevent criminal activities.

• high-tech: haɪ-tɛk (Adjective) - công nghệ cao

  • Ví dụ: High-tech industries are an important part of the U.S. economy, employing nearly 17 million workers in 2014.

• concrete proof: ˈkɒnkriːt pruːf (Noun) - bằng chứng cụ thể

  • Ví dụ: We now have concrete proof that the arsonists and looters were nearly all hardened criminals.

• released convict: rɪˈliːst ˈkɒnvɪkt (Noun) - tù nhân đã được thả

  • Ví dụ: Released convicts will usually be forced to wear a GPS tracking device.

• recidivism: rɪˈsɪdɪvɪzm (Noun) - tái phạm

  • Ví dụ: Recidivism rates are 25 percent lower for offenders who get structured treatment.

Sample 4

Fewer young people choose to work in farming. What are the reasons? Should young people be encouraged to do farming work?

Luận điểm chính: 

Body paragraph 1: Reasons why young adults shy away from farming work

• The prosperity of new and more lucrative occupations

  • agriculture does not have a high income and this earning is unstable

• Universal education

  • young people think that being farmers is not high-class => gravitate towards jobs that are perceived as smart and classy

Body paragraph 2: Young adults should be incentivized to become farmers

• Importance

  • Farming has been and will always be one of the most important sectors of society => a shortage in personnel could lead to worldwide crisis

• Universal education

• young people think that being farmers is not high-class => gravitate towards jobs that are perceived as smart and classy

Body paragraph 2: Young adults should be incentivized to become farmers

Sample: 

Nowadays, more and more youngsters avoid working in the agricultural sector. This trend can stem from several causes that will be discussed in this essay, along with a number of reasons why there should be more young farmers.

There are two reasons why young adults shy away from farming work. First, the prosperity of new and more lucrative occupations leads to people favoring these posts. Compared to other sectors, agriculture around the world does not have a high income and oftentimes, this earning is unstable as it depends heavily on the yield of the crops. Another possible cause for this trend is universal education, which leads to more young people thinking that being farmers is not high-class enough for an educated person. They tend to gravitate towards jobs that are perceived as smart and classy, such as white-collar professions, since lives on the farm are usually painted as modest and dull.

Despite the aforementioned reasons, young adults should be incentivized to become farmers. First, farming has been and will always be one of the most important sectors of society, that is why a shortage in personnel could lead to worldwide crisis. Food being one of the fundamentals of life means that its supply process should be well-oiled in order to sustain people’s well-being. This can only be achieved if there is a sufficient supply of manpower to carry out the production. Moreover, young minds can help drive improvements in this ancient profession. As youngsters are more adaptive to new technologies, they can apply these to their farms and as a result, produce healthier food.

To conclude, young people nowadays are likely to avoid working on farms due to the expansion of alternative professions and universal education. However, these youngsters should be encouraged to participate in farming activities since they can offer manpower and introduce innovativeness to agriculture.

3. Cải thiện bài viết từ band 6.5 lên band 8.0

Đọc bài mẫu là một trong những cách hữu ích để có thể hiểu được một bài Band 8 như thế nào, nhưng bạn có biết cách làm sao để viết được bài Band 8? Như ban đã biết thì bài thi IELTS Writing sẽ được chấm dựa trên 4 tiêu chí

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical resource

• Grammatical Range and Accuracy 

Do đó, để đạt được band 8, bài viết của bạn phải đáp ứng đúng và đủ các tiêu chí trên. Cụ thể hơn ở band 8, thí sinh được yêu cầu phải viết bài viết đảm bảo các nội dung sau:

• Task Response: 

  • Trả lời đầy đủ các phần của câu hỏi. 

  • Câu trả lời được phát triển tốt cho câu hỏi với các ý tưởng có liên quan, mở rộng và được hỗ trợ lẫn nhau.

• Task Response: 

  • Trình tự thông tin và ý tưởng.

  • Hợp lý.

  • Bài có tính liên kết và mạch lạc.

  • Sử dụng đoạn văn đầy đủ và thích hợp.

• Lexical resource 

  • Trình tự thông tin và ý tưởng.

  • Bài có tính liên kết và mạch lạc.

  • Sử dụng đa dạng từ vựng.

  • Lưu loát và linh hoạt để truyền đạt ý nghĩa chính xác.

  • Khéo léo sử dụng các từ vựng không phổ biến nhưng đôi khi có thể không chính xác trong việc lựa chọn từ và sắp xếp thứ tự.

  • Ít mắc lỗi chính tả và/hoặc cấu tạo từ.

• Grammatical Range and Accuracy 

  • Sử dụng nhiều loại cấu trúc.

  • Phần lớn các câu không mắc lỗi.

  • Chỉ thỉnh thoảng mắc lỗi hoặc dùng không đúng ngữ pháp.

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